Writing Proposals 9
Writing with Style in-class exercise

 

 

Guideline 1 (pgs. 163-4)
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Following a thorough policy review, the significance of our past efforts regarding childhood obesity began to bear fruit, whereby our future efforts have been inspired to effect significant change on this important issue.

 

Guidelines 2 - 3 (pg. 164)
Rewrite the following sentence to fit the style suggestion in these guidelines:

Following the third section of our proposed project, a mid-project status review will be conducted by our executive director.

 

Guideline 5 (pgs. 165-66)
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This project will acheive completion by the end of the 2011-12 fiscal year.

 

I'm skipping Guideline 7 to eliminate redundancy

 

Guideline 8 (pgs. 166-67)
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Research on childhood obesity shows that there has been no single cause for this crisis, therefore we should not expect to find a single solution and must instead put together programs involving a range of remedies-- from exercise, to the promotion of wholesome eating, to building self-esteem in children-- in order to acheive success in putting the next generation of children on the path to a healthy and productive adulthood, which is by no means a goal that cannot be reached.